The Two - Revisions

Things that need to be changed

Note: I'm always reluctant to revise things once I've posted them. But I'm not perfect so I do occasionally miss things. And they need to be fixed eventually. This is the Revisions Page for this story The Two

To Do

• Where'd she get the money she has in Part III ? It suddenly appears?

  Planned Fix: A little more detail in part 1(done). A clarification/better bit in Part III/IV.

• Dawn mentions checking out Buffy's aura in Part III but she doesn't actually do that.

  Planned fix: It'll happen after the vampires attack in Part II

• In Part VIII Dawn says she'll ask Willow about sparing the same day (tonight) but she doesn't actually do it until the next school day.

  Planned Fix: Doesn't really need one other than an 'oops I forgot' from Dawn (in her head) for reader benefit.

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Done

• Buffy has several stakes she uses in Part II but as far as we know she doesn't have any weapons and doesn't make any stakes before it happens.

  Fixed: She carves them with her boot knife (which she now mentions here... along with a mention of a jacket and leather boots) while she's waiting.

• Buffy mentioned not feeling the hellmouth in part I but then mentions feeling it in Part V - fixed in part I

• Changed: Part V - The time for the meeting between Buffy, Willow, and Tara at the 'Coffee Garten' was changed to 6pm - to match the next chapter.

• Changed: Part VI - Moved the stairway in the coven house to the right to match my floor plans and hopefully made it clear what side of the house the library and small training room are on. Before it becomes important.

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